Red rose petals
falling
falling
As she reached for her book
sinking
sinking
She waded in the river
not caring
not caring
To get wet.
Her delicate fingers
reaching
reaching
For rim soaked pages.
Tears
streaming
streaming
Down her flushed cheeks.
Her black hair
skimming
skimming
The water, waist deep…
She was breath-taking.
_picture it & write inspiration. Just a “breath-taking” photo. Please check it out ;]
That’s an interesting form and a nice use of the repetition. Very pretty result.
Thank you so much :] I was going to do it from her point of view, but thought it would be more fun from a stranger looking in
I loved the use of repetition. Great use of structure! I really liked the description of her delicate fingers reaching for ‘rim soaked pages. Tears/streaming/streaming.’ Beautiful. Thanks for contributing this week!
– Ermisenda
No thank you for the wonderful comment 😀 I am glad you liked it.
loved this..tweeting it now
thank you so much ^_^